Beauty Is...

[Jerk201]

Living is a quest
Out of need we search
Valiantly struggling to attain
Elation and joy, joy and hope

In this search we find ourselves
Souls discovered, hearts unleashed

Be it found, find us tied
Elsewhere free, elsewhere lost
Alone we are, alone we're not
Unleashed in past, leashed once more
Tied to us, tied to them
You see in them, what they see in you

Only give comments on whether you like it or not, its for a contest and I'm not allowed to collaborate on specifics.

[Binx]

I like it. I think you'll do well in the contest. Judges adore pieces like this. It's very eloquent. Go for it.

[Jerk201]

For Ikul... (added some rhyme wherever possible without completely mutilating the original)

Living is a quest, an impossible test
Out of need we search, outside our nest
Valiantly struggling to attain
Elation with joy, hope without pain

In this search we find ourselves
Souls discovered, hearts not withheld

Be it found, find us tied
Elsewhere free, elsewhere lost
Alone we are, alone we're not
Unleashed in past, leashed once more
Tied to us, tied to them
You see in them, what they see in you

[Binx]

I liked the original version. The beginning of this one with the rhyming throws it off. This message you're trying to give simply was not made for it.